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A charity event to remember
What is the most unusual way you’ve raised money for charity? How did you do it? What did you have to do? Was the event a success? Would you do it again?
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まずタイトルですが無難にthe most unusual way I’ve raised money for charityとしてもいいですが記事をより面白くしたいのであれば自分で作っても大丈夫です。チャリティーなどやったことがない方がほとんどだと思いますのでこれはなかなか難しい問題ですね。しかもmost unusual wayなので普通の募金活動を書いてはいけないということです。なかなかの難問ですが今回は「高校の文化祭で歌を披露してお金を集めた」という経験で記事を書こうと思います。
How did you do it?・・・緊張して散々だった
What did you have to do?・・・歌を練習しなければいけなかった
Was the event a success? ・・・成功しなかった
Would you do it again?・・・もっと緊張に強くなってからもう一回トライしたい。
書き始めはJust imagine you must keep singing in front of hundreds of people though your voice is badly shaking from nervousness and want to escape right now.とかにしてみましょうか。これならば少し興味を引き立たせることが出来るかもしれません。さらにIt was one of the memory which I want to forget.とつつけたらなお読者は気になるかもしれません。
では次のパラグラフに移ります。ここではHow did you do it?とWhat did you have to do?に焦点を置いて、書いていきます。
2 years ago, my high school held a festival for charity, so few weeks earlier we had to choose who would do some campaign (movement) for charity ,but in my class few of them joined this campaign and it was not enough, so I raised my hand. It seemed to me that this experience would be valuable in my life. Then, I was good at singing so I chose to sing and I had to practice for a couple of weeks.
How did you do it? は少し大雑把になってしまいましたが、次のパラグラフでまとめたいと思います。
ここではWas the event a success? とWould you do it again?についてまとめていきたいと思います。
Did I succeed in this charity? No, I didn’t. On the country, It was horrible. There were ten times as many people as I had expected, and it made me really nervous. Actually, I’d never sung in front of hundreds of people, so when I started to sing, my voice was so badly shaking that it was like I was on the verge of crying. It was almost like a trauma, so I thought I would never do this, but for the last 2 years, I has become used to singing in public, so I would like to try once again if I have a chance.
ここではIn conclusion, It was the most unusual way to raise money for charity in my life. Actually, I want to forget it as soon as possible.
A charity event to remember
So why did I decide to do a 90-km walk in six days along the Great Wall of China? Well, the reason was that our local children’s hospital needed to raise money or it would be close. However, I didn’t realise how big a challenge it would be.
Before I went, I thought that I would be walking along a flat surface but when I saw the Great Wall, my heart sank. Part of the time we would be trekking up hundreds of high steps and, worryingly, some of the paths had steep falls on either side and there was nowhere to go because we were surrounded by mountains and forests. However, after a while, I started to love the experience. I was in one of the most amazing places on earth and the views were incredible.
In the end, the adventure was a great success. The hospital was delighted because a group of us managed to raise several thousand pounds.
Would I be keen to help the hospital again next year? Yes, but I think I’ll try and find an easier challenge next time
- 早速始めの段落でrhetorical questionを使っています。Why did I decide to do a 90-km walk in six days along the Great Wall of China? Well, the reason was thatについてですがWhy?と自答してWell, the reason was that・・・と答えているますね。
- I didn’t realise how big a challenge it would be.についてですが、導入にもってくることで読者に興味を引き立たせ、次の段落から楽に説明にはいることができるという便利な表現です。
- In the end, the adventure was a great success.とWould I be keen to help the hospital again next year? Yes, but I think I’ll try and find an easier challenge next timeですが、それぞれ段落ごとに分かれて問に対して丁寧に答えています。この文章は結論の段落がないという少し特殊な解答ですが、記事というのはエッセイとは違い、いかに読者に情報を与え、興味をもってもらうといことに重点が置かれているので結論は省いても減点はそんなにありません。